I’ve noticed some things while reading his books, primarily I think he flows very well. It’s hard to explain, let me give yall an excerpt “Augie Odenkirk had a 1997 Datsun that still ran well in spite of high mileage, but gas was expensive, especially for a man with no job, and city center was on the far side of town, so he decided to take the last bus of the night. He got off at twenty past eleven with his pack on his back and his rolled up sleeping bag under one arm. He thought he would be glad of the downfilled bag by three A.M.” -Mr.Mercedes (literally page 1 so no spoilers I promise). I’ve begun trying to write and I want to learn how to replicate this. Here specifically he uses many commas in one sentence, which I was always taught in school is a big no no. Thoughts?
by Gullible_Travel_4135